Rapunzel Rewritten:

Here is my first draft of my Rapunzel Rewrite.


As soon as Rapunzel heard the witch's feet hit the ground, she rolled her hair up over the balcony.  She scavenged around wildly for her hidden rope.  She had hidden pieces of it under gilded pillows, and under a broken floor board.  Rapunzel began to piece together her rope, with slipperly fingers.  Shaking slightly, she tyed the rope to the ledge of the balcony and threw it down. "Perfect!" ,she cried out in relief.  Trying not to look down the ledge, Rapunzel slowly began to climb down.  Rapunzel could feel goosebumps appearing down her spine from the wind chill.  She said a silent prayer as she landed her feet on the ground for the first time in ten years.

As Rapunzel looked around at the field, she felt as if she were just awaking from a dream.  Everything seemed too beautiful, too perfect to be real.  She bent over to smell every flower, touch every weed, and eventually rolled onto the grass in ecstasy.  This was Amazing! It was as if she were a sailor that had been stuck at see for years and had finally landed on an island. Rapunzel completely forgot herself in the feeling.  Then, she thought she heard a noise she couldn't quite make out. Rapunzel pushed past the trees, mesmerized by the sound.  What was that?
 In her panic, Rapunzel was brought back to earth.

Rapunzel walked through the woods as in a daze.
What Now? Rapunzel thought.  She hadn't really believed she would make it this far. She had escaped the castle, but she still had to rescue Sven and had no idea how to get to Northampton Castle. Perfect! She rolled her eyes at herself. Why do I always end up in these situations? She thought to herself.

One thing's for sure: I'm going to give Rema what she deserves when I find her, thought Rapunzel. This thought gave Rapunzel strength, and she trudged into the forest with her newfound resolve. 

After a four hours of walking, Rapunzel came upon a stream. She was so thirsty she gulped the water down as if it would evaporate within the hour if she didn't drink it. "Huh!" sighed Rapunzel after getting her fill. The water had quenched her dry, raspy throat perfectly. It also reminded her of how tired and hot she was. Rapunzel hid herself underneath a low-hanging bush and decided to camp for the night.

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